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i.
last night i dreamed i kissed you.

broken boy, you still
infect my poetry,
tangle my vocal chords with your half-meant promises.
there are scars on my fingertips where i touched you.
my mouth still burns with the doubt i tasted on your tongue.

ii.
you have to miss me sometimes.
you have to miss the way
i smiled into your kisses
as if they meant something.
you have to miss me because
even now,
a month after i woke up in your bed and realized
it was for the last time,
i keep your "i love you"s hidden somewhere inside me,
folded and folded and folded in on themselves
like notes passed in school,
creases frayed and ink smudged into illegibility.

iii.
we were never good for each other
like the cigarettes we passed at midnight
as we leaned on the church's locked front doors and
pretended we could save ourselves.
we were insane and reveling in our insanity,
half mad and in love with our madness.
but broken boy, you've broken me, and

last night i dreamed i kissed you.
i dreamed about him again last night. i thought i was past that stage. 
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:icontheemptychest:
Can't believe I didn't comment on this. Makes me want to CURSE YOU! at myself. 

Anyway, this is absolutely lovely. Your images are vivid and truthful, and I love how you ended in the same place you began -- with the dream of him kissing you. The second and last stanzas are my favorite. I love the whole thing, but those two stanzas are particularly poignant: tangle my vocal chords with your half-meant promises and pretended we could save ourselves especially hit me. 

Another winner by you, dear. I'm not the least bit surprised. :D 
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:icongallindz:
You write beautifully! And make us want to read more. Nice going!
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TheAdequateGatsby Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! c:
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:icondreamingshadow:
I have nothing other than: This. is. so, so good.
So, so good.
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TheAdequateGatsby Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! <3
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Fragments-of-a-Pawn Mar 16, 2014  Student General Artist
the emotion in this is astounding. your writing is just beautiful.
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TheAdequateGatsby Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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krummsy Feb 5, 2014  New member
I absolutely adore this. I just had a dream the other day about a boy, that kind of boy, and this resonates with me. I love it. I love it. thank you for writing it.
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TheAdequateGatsby Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for commenting! i understand exactly what you mean by "that kind of boy" (unfortunately).
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GaYtAcOs Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is one of those relatable, bittersweet pieces that make me actually feel like my heart is breaking all over again but I love it. :) great job!
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