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i.
you always touched me carefully,
running your light fingers over my shaking hips
as if i were a fragile thing
(to be protected instead of loved)
but in the end
you broke me
anyway.

you always said you didn't know how you felt about me
but the loneliness in your trailing fingertips
told me all i needed to hear.
how many "i love you"s have drowned
in the uncertainty behind your eyelids?
how many kisses have died
in the doubt i tasted on your tongue?


ii.
new years day i woke up in your bed
alone with a headache
and a house of cards in my mind.
you pushed it over the first time you breathed into my ear that morning
whispering you loved me
as if it were a secret
as if i were a secret

we were broken things together
crazy things together
driven insane and driving insane
desperate and deserted
but you can't build a relationship
out of mutual loneliness.

never give yourself to an artist
because you miss writing love poems.

iii.
but someday i'll miss you.
i promise.
the written equivalent of drunken doodles
write drunk; edit sober?
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BlueStanza Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
OMG. LOVE! <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
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TheAdequateGatsby Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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dreamingshadow Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
'how many "i love you"s have drowned
in the uncertainty behind your eyelids?'

love love this.
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TheAdequateGatsby Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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PhoenixFlamesRising Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Facebook has a "Like" button. DeviantArt needs an "Adore" button for poems like this.

That first stanza (the idea of being protected instead of loved, but then being broken by the protector); and the line about not being able to build a relationship out of mutual loneliness -- so eloquent; so true.

Adore.
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TheAdequateGatsby Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
all your comments mean so much to me. thank you thank you thank you
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PhoenixFlamesRising Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014
Your poems are amazing. Thank YOU for them, and for your reply here.   :)
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chadwood Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014   Writer
fantastic writing here.  such evocative words.
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TheAdequateGatsby Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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roninhobbit Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Well done. Love it.
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